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Old 2004-07-20, 07:50
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Sorry to inturupt, but I gotta point out one thing:

Your article is submitted in two tenses -- past and present.

I'm sorry to say it, but it kind of sounds awkward to say, for examples, that the wannies work tirelessly but Twinsen later freed them. That's kind of a paradox.

You have to pick a tense. Either present or past. Make a decision.
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