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Old 2005-08-18, 20:28
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Passion of the Quetch

Passion of the Quetch
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Zoe looked around her.
Since she woke up this morning, and found that Twinsen was not by her side,
she knew something was wrong.
Had the men from the asylum finally caught up with Twinsen?
Was he captured in the Citadel right now?
A wave of apprehension and regret swept over Zoe.
She was worried for the well being of her lover, and regretted telling that pharmacist about Twinsen's
dreams. If he is in the Citadel now, it'd be all her fault.
For hours she stood at the door step of her house,waiting with determined hope for her beloved Twinsen.
Finally, just when she was about to give up, she saw a figure running towards her, coming from downtown.
"It's Twinsen!" thought she, as the figure drew nearer.
He was dressed in a grey nurse uniform, and was panting as he came to her.
Zoe could not coneal her relief.
"You've come back at last my love! Come inside quickly, all the clones must be looking for you!"
Twinsen, overcome with joy, could not find it in himself to articulate a sentence, and merely
said "Oooooh!" as he embraced her.
They walked in, hand in hand to the house.

"Where have you been TWinsen? I've been worried sick" Zoe asked.
"I've just escaped from the asylum, they put me there because of the dreams I've had. I spoke to you about them on
several occaisions."
Zoe thought for a moment, and decided - "I think it's time you use some of the things in the house"
A sudden knock on the door interrupted the short lived reunion.
"Open up, we know you're in there!" said a robotic, emotionless voice from outside.
Zoe knew what was waiting for Twinsen if he got caught.
"Hide!" She cried, "They have itchy trigger fingers!"
Twinsen reacted immideatly.
He ran off into the bedroom, where he could hide safely.
Unfortunately he ran too fast, and banged his head against the wall.
Before he had time to recover, the door burst open and two groboclones entered the house.

The intruders included a Class C green clone, and a menacing class A supergro.
Before Twinsen had time to think, the supergro aimed his gun at him and shot that tranquilizer
pill thingy at him. Twinsen was knocked out cold.
The supergro dragged him out of the house, a look of cold satisfaction on his face.
The green clone turned to Zoe.
"You are charged with aiding an escapee."
Zoe stared at the floor.
"You have been a very bad girl" the grobo continued.
This caught Zoe by surprise, since she was expecting to have her rights read to her, or something of the kind.
"You must be punished" Concluded the grobo.

[Due to the sick nature of the following content, the rest of the post has been sucked and spewed back into an Unrealized Reality (for more information, please watch Farscape Episode 4.11) where it will continue to exist in an empty vacume of space]


--> Transportation of LBA-Lemon-Torture-Fic content through a Wormhole has been approved by Atresica and Lightwing.
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:06
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Um, when I said "let's write an LBA lemon" I was

1. Partially kidding.
2. Meant it to be a spoof, sorta like what Medur wrote
2. I DID NOT MEAN AN LBA LEMON TORTURE FIC!!
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:12
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:23
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WTF. This is outrageous.

Though I suppose I may have went too far. ^^;
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:28
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Rule numero 3, from the FanCreation Rules:


Any image, audio file, or document containing explicit sex should be submitted to Forum Moderator for approval.


1. You didn't submitt it.
2. We don't approve of it, mainly because it kills braincells.

Try not to take it personally.
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:32
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*thinks about the "darthlink i need to talk to you" thread*
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:36
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Well that's great. I spent a bunch of time writting / polishing out the rules and no one reads them (even though it has been technically viewed over 500 times).

The new FanCreation rules have been posted since July 23 of 2004 (which means they've been around for over a YEAR).

I don't like to be a Nazi about rules, but in extreme cases such as this, it's nice to know them.

P.S. Sexual content is not forbidden, it's just that there are certain extremes to which it cannot go.

P.P.S. Darthlink thread did not include a plethora of rape.
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Old 2005-08-18, 21:59
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Oh don't worry Anakin, the original story lies safe on my hard drive in case I need to blackmail you or something.
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Old 2005-08-18, 22:03
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Oh don't worry Anakin, the original story lies safe on my hard drive in case I need to blackmail you or something.
History repeats itself so quickly nowdays
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Old 2005-08-18, 22:10
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The part available was excellent. I love the way the game's problems are used in the fanfic: "Unfortunately he ran too fast, and banged his head against the wall."

This is an important hint that the more serious LBA fanfic writers, such as Anakkin and I, give you. Observe how I also used this in Plof (the famous Bob Vortix quote).

Anyway, the censorship is outrageous! You *asked* for a LBA lemon. Ask and thou shall receive. The rules... tsk, rules, I believe people began to break those like 5000 B.C. And nobody knows this forum's rules because nobody ever uses this forum. An old piece of paper in a dusty corner in the middle of nothing isn't really obvious, you know.
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Old 2005-08-18, 23:09
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Well that's great. I spent a bunch of time writting / polishing out the rules and no one reads them (even though it has been technically viewed over 500 times).

The new FanCreation rules have been posted since July 23 of 2004 (which means they've been around for over a YEAR).

I don't like to be a Nazi about rules, but in extreme cases such as this, it's nice to know them.

P.S. Sexual content is not forbidden, it's just that there are certain extremes to which it cannot go.

P.P.S. Darthlink thread did not include a plethora of rape.

Sorry, but I don't understand your logic.
You really think that if someone brings himself to the level of reading an LBA fan fic, he will mind if there's rape or not?
Do you really think that if someone is reading a story of a grobo having sex with Zoe, he will actually give a damn if the sex is willing or not?
JESUS.


WHO CARES?
AND WHY?
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Who:
Atresica cares.
I care.
I'm sure a bunch of other people would.

Why:
Because there are rules, for one. And I don't give a crap that it's been like a YEAR since they were last published, or that nobody ever visits this forum. I took the time to write them out, I announced it in BIG BOLD letters. It has been a YEAR, and NOBODY has objected to them. You got objections to the rules, you take it out in the "Site and Forum" section.

Another thing, dude, you ever been a victim of a violent rape? Rape is not sex....and in written form, it's not even lemon. Rape is a whole-nother mother, and if you had clear understanding of the subject, you'd comprehend just how offensive it can be to some people.
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Old 2005-08-19, 02:24
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if your gonna write a spoof lemon could you keep it consensual? rape dosent really go down too well with everyone,
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I don't know what was included in the deleted part, but if there was explicit rape scenes, it should be deleted since it offends some people. Rape is a serious thing, you know. I mostly think that you can joke about anything, but if people are offended, then you need to think twice.
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The part of the story available was very well-written and I laughed my ass off
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Old 2005-08-19, 15:58
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yes, it was very good, im'a just saying that's all.
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I also thought it was really cool up to the part where I almost vomited from reading about my favorite characters getting gangbanged by clones.
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Oh well.

An altertnate ending someday perhaps?
Stay tuned!
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Old 2005-08-19, 22:52
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I also thought it was really cool up to the part where I almost vomited from reading about my favorite characters getting gangbanged by clones.
yes, i did find that a bit icky myself, i don't mind reading lemons, and i must admit that i sometimes stumble across a few that are well written, but i really don't like the sound of zoe etc getting gangbanged.

maybe keeping it a twinsenxzoe centred lemon would be better?

or maybe make it into a lime instead?

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Old 2005-08-20, 00:22
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I'm always in favour of spoofs / humourous type of ones, that make fun of your average lemon.
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I bet Zoé's grobosexual.

No seriously, if cartooned porn is accepted then this is not worse. I do not say anything is right or wrong, just that something is "wronger"(more wrong, i mean that cartooned porn should be aswell be forbidden if texted porn is).
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Old 2005-08-20, 21:19
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I'm always in favour of spoofs / humourous type of ones, that make fun of your average lemon.
yeah, so am i
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Ym, I don't get one thing, why did Twinsen got cought in the end ? All he had to do was hide behind the bathtub...
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tsk, I wanted to read the full thing.
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Oh no, trust me, no one except for Atresica wants to read such stuff.

She lives off of GAFF.
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I'd like the rest of it. The intro seems so carefully well written and it's so annoying when you start getting interested in a story and then it is cut.

I don't think it would offend anyone, whatever it is (and if whoever still cares). It's a mere fan fic. Mere words. Also, you can always put a warning in the title of this thread, like you've done to other "offensive" threads.
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