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Old 2002-06-13, 00:27
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Arrow The story of the creation of Twinsun

This is a story, that I just fast wrote. I am planning to make a sequel to it, so you might not understand everything. Anyways, here it is:

Book of Twinsun
CHAPTER 1
There was once 5 small ducks and their mother.

One of them was very thin and weak. If it hadn’t been for its large, heavy brain it had probably died very early. But now it sat there by its mother and cried.

One of them was very proud. It had long, dark hair that grew very tall down over its shoulders. However it wasn’t very happy about the speed of the hairgrowing, with its pretty smart brain it thought that soon all the universe should be covered in hair. But now, it sat down by its mother and cried.

One of them was very stupid. But it was also taller and bigger than the others, therefor it got more food than the others, and as a reaction of that, it was very healthy. But now it sat down by its mother and cried.

One of them was very boring. It thought and thought, but it could not come up with any good jokes as the others did all the time. Still it was nice-looking, it had a very beautiful face. But now it wat down by its mother and cried.

Then there was one more. Though none of the others noticed it just then. It was starving and nearly dead, cause it was a very nice duck, it shared the little food he got with some small birds that only he could see. But now it sat down all alone and cried.

The tears ran down, more and more. The birds flew away to avoid drowning and the small ducks and their mother was about to drown when a traveller picked them up. The traveller saved them and put them into 5 beds. Although, the stupid one did not see the starving one and took up two beds alone, because of its size. Therefor, the small one had to sit at the dirty old floor of the traveller’s rusty cart.

-Why do you cry, the traveller asked the thin and weak duck.
-I cry because the others pick at me since I am so thin and weak, the thin and weak duck said.
-Have you got any idea why they pick at you?, the traveller said.
It quickly and answered:
-I think that the others are jealous at me because of my cleverness, it said.

The traveller did not answer. Instead he asked the proud one:
-Why do you cry?
-I cry because the others pick at me since my hair is so fast-growing.
-Have you got any idea of why they pick at you?, the traveller asked.
It confident answered:
-I think that the others are jealous at me beacause of my high-quality hair.

The traveller did not answer. He asked the fat one:
-Why do you cry?
-I cry because the others pick at me since I am so stupid.
-Have you got any idea of why they pick at you?, the traveller asked.
It took a while for the duck to answer.
-I think that the others are jealous at me because of my fast-thinking brain.

The traveller did not answer. Instead he asked the boring one.
-Why do you cry?
-I cry because the others pick at me since I am so boring.
-Have you got any idea of why they pick at you?, the traveller asked.
The duck answer in the most boring of voices:
-I think that the others are jealous at me just because of my nice-looking face.

The traveller did not answer and thought for a long time.

Then it screamed:

-LOSE YOUR FEATHERS!

All the ducks, except the mother, lost their feathers.

Then the traveller asked the amazed ducks:

-Are you willing to sacrifice anything to make your biggest wishes come true?
-YES!, they answered.
-That was what I thought, the traveller muttered and smiled at their mother, who smiled back, although she felt that there was something that she had forgotten.

Outside the birds sang a song of death and dispair:
When she forgets the world is getting into the nets...

The traveller asked the tiny and weak one:
-What do you wish?
-I wish that I was much bigger.
Suddenly the tiny and weak one turned into a large creature that did not really look like a duck. No, it was more looking like an elephant. It was stunned. Very stunned.
-I’ve made your brain to fit into that thing of yours. Good luck!

When dreams come true...

The traveller now turned to the long-haired one.
-What do you wish?
-I wish that my hair could stop growing so fast.
Suddenly the long-haired one turned into a unproud and boring being with the hairgrowth now just limited to a very small area on the now bald head. All the hair was forced into this little area and now it looked as a tiny ponytail.
-I’ve made your hair a lot more handy. Good luck!

Oh one, oh one, do not wait too long...

The traveller now turned to the fat one.
-What do you wish?
-I wish that I was intelligent and not so fat.
Suddenly the fat one’s stomach disappeared and it’s brain was filled with pure intelligence.
-I’ve made your brain a lot bigger, although I had to take away something else to make it fit.


Please do see, please do see, for the end is near...

The traveller now turned to the boring one.
-What do you wish?
-I wish that I was funny!
Suddenly the boring one’s nose grew out to be a long, hard one, and it’s beautiful ears grew enormously tall. For a split-second it was horrified, but then it started to joke with the others.

Now, now is the last chance, oh, master, do see...

-There you go, the traveller said to the mother, looking happy. His voice was relieved and he headed back into the cart

No, no, he will see...

Just as the mother started to walk away with her children, a cold voice flew across the air.

-Please, come back, you’ve forgotten something.

She counted the children quickly, there were just 4, although they were 5 from the beginning.

DISASTER!

-Run, run off quickly!, she hissed to the 4.
She wore a terrified look and slowly she turned her back to them and went back into the cart.

The four did as she said and set off to different islands.

This is the end, oh please, please, do not wait to come back...

The birds looked at one of them as he sat off in a boat.

The mother appeared into the cart again.
The traveller sat on the floor bent over something.
-What do you wish, he said, it was the same cold voice that had been flying through the air a couple of seconds before.
He turned his head to the mother and she caught a glimpse of his eyes, they were red and gleaming.
None of them said nothing to each other, cause the the thing that the traveller was bent over was the smallest duck, and he just answered the traveller’s question.
-I wish that I was accepted, I wish that I was mighty and powerful, I wish that I was funny, I wish that my hair was beautiful, I wish that I was big, I wish that I was feared, I wish that I was not so DAMN NICE!
Suddenly something happened with the duck. The mother ran away, out from the cart, stopped a few 100 meters from it and whistled. In a second hundreds of birds was surrounding her.

-We have no time to wait, I made the mistake that was told in the book. This is the planet. The one planet. This is where we shall work.
A distant “adieu” flew across the air, it was the travellers now cold voice, they saw the cart fly away, and this made the mother very anxious.
-Quickly we must prepare Twinsun!
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Old 2002-06-13, 00:38
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That's a really really really nice story
I am amazed to see your name above it

Can't wait to see how it continues

But don't you reckon it suposses to be in Fanfiction?
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Old 2002-06-13, 01:08
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Welcome to the fanfiction club my friend!
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Old 2002-06-13, 02:13
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No!

The copying from Word to Internet Explorer deleted the [i] thingies.

*editing*
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Old 2002-06-13, 02:19
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Note that the grammar is not at all good, cause I wrote it fast, and never returned for my own spellchecking or grammarchecking or so.

Oh thank you for the good response, can't believe that your name was on top of it, Atre

Btw... LW has handsweat...
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Old 2002-06-13, 08:24
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That is just such a cool story.
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Old 2002-06-13, 19:13
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Hmmm... I actually wrote one last year, about the moddiés
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Old 2002-06-13, 20:50
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How did that go?
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Old 2002-06-14, 02:48
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It is in either the fan fics or fan creations thread.
It is the only thread there posted by me, so you wont miss it. Although, it might be difficult for you to get the point, since it is very unrecent today.
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Old 2002-06-14, 08:01
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I'll look out for it...
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Old 2002-06-14, 18:23
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Neat, Gustav. Sounds a lot like a fable.
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Old 2002-06-14, 18:43
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You know, I've just worked sumin out. The first duck becomes a grobo, the second a quetch, third a sphero and fourth a rabbibunny.
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Old 2002-06-14, 18:55
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I'll look out for it...
Here
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Old 2002-06-15, 04:24
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Old 2002-06-15, 10:33
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Old 2002-06-15, 13:56
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Old 2002-06-20, 17:05
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good story but what was the 5th duck

P.S: that other story was really good to
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Old 2002-06-30, 11:13
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Yep, it is Awesome. Can`t wait for the sequel.
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IN THE SEQUEL THE 5TH DUCK WILL BE REVEALED!

Dont miss out!

Book of Twinsun -2-

You will get these answers:
-Who is Duck 5?
-What happened to the mother duck?
-How come that Twinsun was Twinsun?
-Why has Twinsun got 2 suns?
-Am I mad?

Coming to a thread near you - SOON!
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That fanfic is very very nice.

(oh yeah, I remember that "The Plot" stuff)
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Old 2002-07-05, 15:59
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Why did lightwing go on vacation at this critical moment......
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Old 2002-07-05, 16:43
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Is that your way of saying: "Oh no, I'm hungry, I need fanfics!" ?
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Old 2002-07-05, 17:00
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No, that is my way of saying "Save us from Gustav"
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Old 2002-07-05, 21:59
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waaaaaaaa ha ha...... gus is alright.... he makes cool stories
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