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Old 2005-08-08, 22:01
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The Boy from the Light

Disclaimer: I may have been inspired by real people or events when writing this story, so please try to be good humoured about it.
The boy from the light

Light.
A white bright light as far as my eyes can see.
And in the middle of it, Madeline is standing peacefully.
She's just as beautiful as I remember her.
My sweet Madeline has come back to me.

I try to call out to her, but nothing happens.
I cannot move, I'm trapped.
Slowly, gradually, the light begins to diminish.
As it gets darker, madeline's figure moves further and further.

"No!" I cry as she moves out of sight "Come back!"
"Don't leave me again, Madeline!"
"Come back!"
"MADELINE!"

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I woke up with a start.
It didn't take me long to regain my composure, it's wasn't the first time I dream of Madeline.
It's been three years since she left me, I try to forget her, but the dreams don't go away.
All my friends told me to get over her, they tell me she wasn't the woman for me.
I try to believe them, but there's a part of me that won't let go.
I can't live like this anymore.
I just want to live, ffs.
"JUST LET ME LIVE" I cried into the darkness of my bedroom.

That night was the last straw.
Something had to be done, and I knew it.
But what could I do?
For years I've been trying to find a cure for my obsession with Madeline, to no avail.
However, in a stroke of luck, or an intervention of fate, if you believe in that - A friend told me about a wise sage who lives in the rocky peak of a mountain not far from my home. He's goes by the title of a the Dali Luminous, and is known to have solved many problems, both wordly and personal, some even call him "the boy from the light".

What did I have to lose?
I packed my things and left for the top of Luminous' mountain.
When I reached the peak, I saw a huge mansion, surrounded by a tall fence.
The place was exquisite, the gardens were well nurtured and breath taking.

I arrived at a huge gate.
On it a sign read: "Dali Luminous - Making sense out of life."
I began to feel apprehensive, for I knew so little about this man.
He could be dangerous, and I came here alone.
Reluctantly, I rang the bell.
A guard appeared, tall and muscular.
"Dear folk, I am Rodrigo, the personal, guard, of the master. Who, are you?" He asked.
"My name is Nicholas Nickelby" I answered nervously, "I've came to see Dali Luminous"
"Aaaah. " He replied.
He beckoned me to follow him, and I did.

We arrived at a huge chamber, in the center there was a huge throne, on which sat a man whom I thought must be the boy from the light.
The guard left us.

A feeling of reverence over came me as I looked at the sage, and I immedeately knelt on one knee.
At last, he spoke.
"Well, here I am, the boy from the light. Am I everything you hoped for?"
Not expecting such a question, I hesitated.
"I want to know the truth" He said. "Nothing is stronger than the truth!"
Reassured by these words, I spoke at last.
"Well, you're honor, I have only just met you" I managed.
His reply took me by surprise once more.
"Ah, but I know you. I know a lot about you."
This was already turning out to be quite a strange conversation.
I decided to inquire at his last statement. "Well, we've just met, surely you couldn't know that much about me, your honor"
"But I do, I know what you do at night" He replied.

This was getting ridiculous, but something in me urged to inquire further.
"Oh, and what is it exactly that I do at night?" I asked, getting more confident.
"I'm sure you were lying in bed, masterbating, somehow." He said.
"You were thinking about XXX althought you didn't really want to."

Dumbfounded at this, I began to grow annoyed.
"Now see here, I came here for help, if you--"
"Nothing is stronger than the truth."
"Yes, you said that, but-" I started.
"I am somebody! Everybody is somebody!" He interrupted me again.
"Look, can you please stop with this quotes for just a second?" I asked.
"Here's a quote you quote-driving site-maker! we members need to be organized!"
"That's very nice," I replied, but was interrupted one more.
"The word 'nice', Nicholas" He said. "Was it sarcastically, or was it true? If sarcastically, you have brought a joke + scandalized yourself."

Driven to the brink by the pressure of this accusation,I could take no more.
Before I could even think about what I was doing, I began shouting.
"IF YOU COULD JUST SHUT YOUR TRAP FOR A MOMENT PLEASE, I COULD TELL YOU WHY I CAME HERE." I bellowed.
I had obviously gone too far, judging from the sudden expression on his face.
"Guard!" he called. "This man is opressing me!"
Immedeatly Rodrigo appeared.
I knew I was in trouble.
"Stop spamming!" the guard cried "Or you will be warned for 30 days!"
I was beginning to feel like I was being ganged up on.
"Now see here--" I started.
"CALM DOWN IMMEDEATLY, YOU MAN " The guard shouted.
Before I could even respond, the Dali begain shouting as well.
"WE MEMBERS HAVE TO BE ORGANIZED" He cried.
The guard stepped forward.
"LOOK, STOP WITH THE FLAMING, OK? YOU WILL BE BANNED."
I began to protest, but Dali Luminous shouted:
"HERE I AM, THE BOY FROM THE LIGHT! AM I EVERYTHING YOU HOPED FOR?!"
The guard caught me by the neck.
"YOU ARE NOW BANNED FOR 30 DAYS, WHAT DO YOU HAVE TO SAY TO THAT?"


to be continued.
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This is work of higher intelligences, who take other, esoteric and psychological sciences into account than we are normally used to even consider, numerology being one of them, because everything for them is ritualistic and everything is meant for a deep programming of our psychological state. One day witchcraft and science will collide.

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Old 2005-08-08, 23:55
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I don't seem to understand the purpose of the last half of the story.

As well, I think you should remove the "smileys" and "+" signs. They don't really belong in a literary format.
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Old 2005-08-09, 00:03
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I think this supposed to be a joke... Although I don't really get it.
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Old 2005-08-09, 00:52
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Utterly brilliant, and definitely a subtle allegory for life on the forum, with a wonderfully post-modern twist.

Superb stuff David.
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Old 2005-08-09, 07:25
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hehe

actually, I did laugh a bit while reading it.

I just read the middle to the end, btw.

PS: who is Rodrigo, outside of the story?
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Old 2005-08-09, 14:04
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My first fanfic I have read in this forum, my comments:

I can't see any purpose with it.
For me it looks more like a fanfic about a personal(MBN) arguement that have happend, and it have been rearanged. For example, they didnt give obras any 30 day ban, he actully asked for it instead.

Lol, it just hit me i've been ignoring its purpose just to be funny . I think the funness was something like 4/10
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Old 2005-08-09, 14:52
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LOL - very amusing indeed. Although the amount of time you must have spent writing that does disturb me somewhat

Some of these replies are Gold too
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Old 2005-08-09, 19:43
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5/5 cryptic sentences!

You have truly brought a joke + scandalized yourself!

but still...
YOU ARE BANNED FROM MY FORUM, HOW CAN YOU REPLY TO THAT!?
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Old 2005-08-09, 20:41
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- Anakin and Aule: Oh, stop fussing. Besides, I'm not even that authoritarian. While I wanted to give Anakin one more chance, a super-mod on my forum, Animon, Warned him. I'm the most liberal there, and I will be the first to unban someone, if they request it. David (not Anakin) was perma-banned on my forum, he PM'ed me here on the MBN, apologizing, 90% of the members of my forum disagreed on the unban, and yet I unbanned him.

But however, Anakin, I like your fanfic very much, simply because it shows perfectly, who you really are.
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Old 2005-08-09, 23:16
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- Anakin and Aule: Oh, stop fussing. Besides, I'm not even that authoritarian. While I wanted to give Anakin one more chance, a super-mod on my forum, Animon, Warned him. I'm the most liberal there, and I will be the first to unban someone, if they request it. David (not Anakin) was perma-banned on my forum, he PM'ed me here on the MBN, apologizing, 90% of the members of my forum disagreed on the unban, and yet I unbanned him.

But however, Anakin, I like your fanfic very much, simply because it shows perfectly, who you really are.
What is that supposed to mean?

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This is work of higher intelligences, who take other, esoteric and psychological sciences into account than we are normally used to even consider, numerology being one of them, because everything for them is ritualistic and everything is meant for a deep programming of our psychological state. One day witchcraft and science will collide.
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Old 2005-08-10, 00:28
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He means (i think)that you showed yourself to be enough bored and have spare time to write a fanfic about a special member, and that your a tease
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Old 2005-08-10, 04:20
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But however, Anakin, I like your fanfic very much, simply because it shows perfectly, who you really are.
Very original reply, utterly brilliant, and definitely a subtle allegory for life on the forum, a wonderful post twist!

(this is not sarcasm btw)
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Old 2005-08-10, 07:18
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He means (i think)that you showed yourself to be enough bored and have spare time to write a fanfic about a special member, and that your a tease
Oh.
Well no.
I just had an urge to write something, and I found the events here on MBN funny enough to be a source for inspiration.

Stop trying to analyze everything, you're not psychologists
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lol - I love how ridiculous everything gets - it keeps me amused on those long cold nights
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Very original reply, utterly brilliant, and definitely a subtle allegory for life on the forum, a wonderful post twist!

(this is not sarcasm btw)
Dude, don't copy what I say. Come up with your own wordy rubbish.
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I didn't think it was funny anyway. Anakin brought back up the worst thing I ever hated: My memories about mean things that happened to me.
Sorry to be blunt on you, Anakin, but even if this fan fiction has a connection to the hilarious post-modern mumblings, I think honestly it wouldn't be so pleasing if I ever read it. It's like reviving that website containing all my 'senseless' quotes.
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Old 2005-08-11, 04:15
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Dude, don't copy what I say. Come up with your own wordy rubbish.
wordy rubbish XD

yeah whatever nevermind hello hello hello how low???
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Well, it's quite nice and I must confess that I laughed hard when Nicholas Nickleby had the conversation with the guard. I like the style of it, it reminds me of my post in the wrestlefeast thread.
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Thanks again for the feedback, everyone.

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I just had an urge to write something, and I found the events here on MBN funny enough to be a source for inspiration.
Well, you can still be a tease

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Stop trying to analyze everything, you're not psychologists
You simply asked for a fight by starting this/a thread ^^
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Ah, the good old days when even bans were taken as a witty joke.

Good one anakin, though I could only appreciate it years later.
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A few years ago, under the guise of protecting the population, Dr. FunFrock herded the planet's habitants into the southern hemisphere. The repression is harsh. Every day brings more and more arrests, and the people slowly begin to lose hope. In an effort to keep their spirits up, the people sometimes evoke an ancient legend along with the name of a goddess, Sendell. The mentioning of the legend or Sendell has since been forbidden by Dr. FunFrock. Meanwhile... a young quetch named Twinsen has been having strange dreams...
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Apparently this whole story was based off actual posts between Illumina and other MBN members.

It's like if we picked stuff Ditzy says and make a hilarious story out of it, except Ditzy's posts aren't as wicked and bizarrely interesting as the boy from the light aka Illumina was.
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ha, I remember this thread
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